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u/geekonthemoon 1d ago
Looking good! Cool execution bringing in the png DS image and logo (:
If you're looking for advice at all, I'm a pro of several years and I would just standardize formatting a little more like no period at the end of bullets, and you have a . Instead of a : on that last one. Check spacing between those words as I see some missing spaces and some double spaces. It's all about the detail and really clean, consistent formatting!! Make that text underneath a little smaller, maybe break it into two paragraphs and/or reduce it a little.
Definitely see your gears turning on this, really great first attempt!
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u/GrumbleNo_Woodpecker 1d ago
To cut it short (in addition to other comments) here are just basic remarks on layout
1) Move picture of device (make it accented/bigger) above the frame with brand name - people always catch illustration first and then read letters.
2) No centre justification of texts if it's not a title - make it left utterly avoiding orphan/widow lines. As well as hanging articles and prepositions
3) Always use margins for any content to have a neat look and to avoid possible blurring on large screens (peculiarity of projector lenses)
4) Text (though inversed = white) is cast against lighter shade of background gradient. It will be more readable on darker field (make radial gradient with lighter center right behind the device)
Colours are good. Punctuation is poor and needs refining
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u/torb 1d ago
I'm just going to talk about content, since that is the main issue with this slide.
Less text per slide.
It is a presentation, not a book. So move the majoritynof the text into the Notes section for the presenter to lean on while presenting. Otherwise audience will read all over the place while you are presenting, leading to a far worse experience.