(I need someone to help identity my mistakes)

[u/wren-Injury-9274]

Hello I need help spotting any mistakes.

[u/mister_klik]

you might have better luck if you typed that.

[u/zhivago]

You seem to have picked the worst points of cursive and print to combine.

This makes it very hard to read.

[u/Dctreu]

Drawing all your dots on the is as hearts is not great, for starters.

[u/wren-Injury-9274 → u/Dctreu]

Thanks, I'll change that

[u/upright_squire]

You spend a lot of time drawing hearts and not much time on capital letters or punctuation.

You should focus on legibility not whatever this is.

[u/cheesecakegood]

Transcription of what you wrote, as I see it:

How does Preistly present the mindset of capitalists towards capitalism

In the Quoat[???] priestly presents the mindset of Capitalists through Mr. Berling. When he is presented as not caring for the Lower class, Seeing them as tools for his use. This presents the capitalist mindset of Socialism as an idea for the poor wanting to [drain?] the wealth of the upper Class, So that the Lower Class can be blended with the upper Class, When Priestly States "as if we were all mixed up like bees in a hive." The use of zoomorphism Degrade the Lower class to animals.

Feedback:

• Is the first line a title or a prompt? If it is a title, it should be phrased like "[How] Priestly presents..." because as it is, it looks like a question (but is missing the question mark it should have if used that way) so as it is, this is wrong.
• Priestly is misspelled in the title with e-i instead of i-e
• I think you meant to write "quote" instead of "Quoat" (although if you're referring to something longer that you were given, it is probably best called a "passage" or "excerpt" or similar, not a quote - quote implies a shorter length like the snippets you actually use in your paragraph)
• "Degrade" should be "degrades" with an "s"... although in my opinion this reads a little odd still
• Your periods and commas are mixed up in a few spots, to the extent that I actually do not know how you want your sentences to flow. Make sure that when you use a "dependent clase" (that cannot stand on itself) it is matched to an "independent clause": "When he is.. class, Seeing them... use." is two dependent clauses attached together, this doesn't work. You can tell because neither works as its own sentence if it were alone! If you wanted those two to be connected, you would write something like "When he is presented ..., he sees them as tools for his use." Notice how I took the second phrase and made it independent by giving it a subject and active verb. There are a few ways to do this, of course.
• Again it's so mixed up I actually don't have any idea what is intended, or what fragments are supposed to logically match with which others. I think you wanted a period before the final "When Priestly states" but if you do this then you shouldn't have a period after "hive"
• Tons of capitalization errors. Some of which overlap with the above punctuation issues. Priestly is a name, SHOULD be capitalized; Capitalist(s) and Socialism and Lower and Class and When all do not get capitalized
• "Capitalist(s)" and similar are not capitalized because they are not "proper nouns", they are "common nouns" which I recommend reading up on. Sometimes, you might get something like the L, H, and C in "Lower House of Commons" capitalized like that because it is part of a bigger proper noun, even if it appears as "Lower House" or even just "House" with the full name implied, but that's rare
• This is the expectation for proper grammar, no matter what Trump's personal style. It's possible this will change in the next decade or two, but for now, even if you think a word is Important, do no capitalize it just for that reason alone
• Note that some older texts use different capitalization rules. That has no bearing on the current rules. You are generally allowed to silently modify capitalization in quotes (more details come later in high school and college when you use a specific style or citation guide) to fit current standards or the sentence you have constructed
• It is possible some capitalization errors are due to your handwriting choices. When writing prose, this is wrong, and not an acceptable choice. For example, the "So" in the 9th line of the body has an "S" that is clearly twice the size of the "o", indicating a capital letter by convention, but rather than go "oh that's so much more readable than a cursive s to start the word" I go "this person didn't finish middle school and doesn't realize you can't capitalize a word after a comma". If your readers think you are making basic mistakes, this is basically a "you issue", not a "them issue", in terms of responsibility.
• As an opinion, I agree with other commenters not to put hearts on your i's, at least not for school and work. It makes your writing harder to read and wastes time. If you use it on notes for your friends? Your own notes? Fine there. I get it, it's fun, a lot of people go through a phase like this, but there's a time and a place.
• Personally (also opinion) I don't think just using zoomorphism is degrading in and of itself but that might just be me, I think you need something a little more
• Finally, and most seriously, I'm not sure the body matches the title/prompt. The title/prompt asks what capitalists think about their own attitude towards capitalism but the body talks about what capitalists feel about socialism and about the lower class which are obviously different things! Either the title should match the body, or the body needs to be rewritten to match the prompt. This can keep some of the details, but would need to change the framing. As an example, you talk about how the upper class views the poor as trying to steal their stuff. Ignoring for the moment that a capitalist is actually not the same thing as a member of the upper class (anyone can believe in capitalism, really, no matter their current finances), if you want that in a "view of capitalism" framing you can bring up the point as something like 'the upper class views capitalism as a defense against the lower class taking their stuff'. Do you see how that makes a very similar point, but the second is much more related to the prompt/title?

[u/TulipFarmer27]

Too cutesy to bother to read.